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I think the book is moving forward fast Denice and Ben just met and now their preforming in "a Midsummer nights dream" together. I think the foundation of this story ...

snoink, where I live the peeps they sell are chocolate, green and yellow for Valentines day. The chocolate ones are little bears and the rest are chicks. I would live ...

Your piece sounds like a motivational speech. I think you did a fantastic job. Another quote you could put in there is "The only place where success comes before work ...

I watched it. It was Awesome! I liked the show part where there was the fiddler in the canoe dueling with his shadow. I also liked how the Native Canadians ...

Oh little marshmallow Peeps, I pass by you in the grocery store, There is nothing I have coveted more. I snatch the last box off the shelf and hurry out ...

That poem was ok for being one that just popped out of your head. I would change.. Ever will lose. Mabye you should say something like "you will always loose". ...

Thanks for the comments :smt003 .

Round and round I go. Back and forth, To and fro, Never stopping, Never talking, As life passes by, If I were you I would take out "As life passes ...

It is a very short poem.When you talk about the "us" in your poem I wish you would elaborate. I would change For it fills me with warmth You cannot ...

I think your story is hilarious. I think you took an excruciatingly long time getting to the point though. For I don't think the average reader needs to know about ...

Sometimes that happens when you have it set on poetry format. I hope that helps. Have a great night. I love your poem. Fiction :smt003

You are definitely not losing the talent to write. I do have a couple of suggestions for you.. And I can feel its mark And I can feel it's mark ...

what kind of anti virus do you have? If you have AVG windows care Or Spybot you could run a spy sweeping program on your computer. You could also try ...

Please review "My Phenology" :mrgreen:

This sounds more like a rant than lyrics. Please do not use text speak when you write a poem. Also I think you used "you" way too much. your just ...