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Can you review "In cold blood" in narrative poetry. I would like to see what you think and I would see if I am getting better at poetry. Have a ...

This poem is incredibly depressing.Please remember to capitalize "I". I cannot find any other mistakes as far as grammar and spelling.I have one suggestion I don't really like how your ...

This is intriguing. I like it sounded friendly but overly inviting. I didn’t trust it. I gently pushed the door open and practically peered through the slowly widening gap. I ...

In cold blood We saw them coming, two socials across the park. Intent on vengeance, their mouths spew poisonous accusation's, we are too close to avoid confrontation. Johnny's fear quickly ...

I like it. Your story reminds me of "The Monkeys Paw". I recently did a project on Africa and I don't think that many people off the Ivory Coast practice ...

Your main character sounds like she has had quite a horrible life thus far.I am going to focus on your sentences because I have noticed a couple mistakes. Clients are ...

I think you did a great job. Some parts of the piece seem metaphorical. I have not read any of the books you read before submitting this piece but, after ...

I liked the start of your story. My sister is talented with ballet and she has done numerous performances. I think you should talk more about her "fighting imaginary dragons ...

That was Awesome.I love it it seams like a cross between Star Wars and Fringe the show on T.V. Thank you for the review of my first work. I think ...

You have an interesting poem. I hope you entered it in the writing Olympics. It is so vague thought I think you could change the second line around a little ...

Your photos are beautiful. My favorite one is the picture of the robin. What type of camera did you use? Anyway I like your photos so keep posting them. Have ...

Your poem is ok.I have a few suggestions for you... My siblings or confused I think you might want to say "my siblings are confused". I work for her she ...

I thought the first chapter had a little bit of a patronizing tone. I don't think that program that you described very accurately portrays what it is like to be ...

I have never reviewed something like this I thought it was worth a try. I think that the background seems rather blurry and it would look better if it was ...