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This is a minuscule poem.I think that it is pretty good for your first poem. I think maybe you could add some more imagery in the form of similes, metaphors ...

I like the poem "Falling Up".I think you did a good job but you could elaborate on them a little to include more imagery. Right now I think they seem ...

I think you did a great Job on this poem. A kind word, a smile- that was your signature. Even in battle, you shone. these are my favorite lines. I ...

Wondering Synapses misfire like dying embers echoing through the corridors of my mind. Fragments of happiness and desperation intertwine. Heirlooms passed down through generations no more. Slipping aw

I think your photos are great except the form the squirrels point of view one.I love your photos of Greece and I am jealous you got to go there. What ...

I like this poem. I do have a couple of suggestions though. First you might want to add some more punctuation. Next... When I was a child I planted dreams ...

Some ideas for powers are... 1. They are psychic and they can read peoples minds. 2. They can fly and they can move things with their mind. 3. They can ...

I think that you did a great job with this poem. I’m a nightmare disguised in happy lies This is my favourite line.I think you did a great job with ...

I think your poem is a little confusing in its current state. While reading it I also noticed a mistake rhe heartbeat taunted me. I think you mean "The heartbeat ...

Wow you certainly have had an interesting life so far. I have a suggestion, please break your writing up into paragraphs. If you break up writing into paragraphs it makes ...

I love Don’t speak around the gossip ones, For they have enough to say. We all want to be “someone” In the future we just may. There is so much ...

:mrgreen: I like it . I do have one suggestion please tell the person in the striped gray sweater to stop popping up in random scenes. I admired your resourcefulness ...

Your doing good in french. I think this poem is beautiful I especially love the last line. Avant que les hommes, plein d'appétit arrive -- pour cuellir cette fleur d'amour ...

I thought part two was good. You definitely built up the suspense at the end. I did notice a few mistakes you need to remember to capitalize the beginning of ...

Thank you all for the reviews. I called them socials instead of socs because I didn't want to confuse anyone. Thank you for the punctuation tips if I turn this ...