fallenangel1239

Thank you. I get where you guys are coming from with saying that some parts didn't seem to fit well as song lyrics. You're right though, it's hard to know ...

Well, this was quite different from the typical poem. The way the words were arranged kind of confused me at first. I like how you've got the underlying message though. ...

Okay, I have a suggestion. I do agree with thething912. It just seems like a rant from a horse. You say that it is supposed to be a man that ...

I really like this. While reading it I found that I can almost perfectly relate to whats being said through the poem. This brought back a lot of memories. Anyways. ...

I'm going to have to agree. I think what you are trying to say in this poem could be said a bit better. I was actually going to suggest the ...

I've changed it around a little to make it more like the song I wrote it as. I know that its short, you don't need to remind me of that. ...

Very nice. I really liked it. While reading it I could picture in my mind what was going on. I don't really have suggestions. I do think that it could ...

I've got to agree. I like the mysteriousness in the poem, but it was a bit hard to follow. It flowed well for the most part though. There's a few ...

I don't wanna be Just another echo (an echo) Or just another girl to you I know you say you love me, You tell me I'm your everything. And I ...

I must say. this poem was really good. I liked the flow and rhyming. I too noticed the change in rhyming structure, and have to agree that you should use ...

I do have to agree with what the others said. The constant of "one cannot" was a bit 'unsatisfying' to me. Of course, if it is a first poem then ...

A wolf was walking through the forest one day. It’s fur was a brilliant white as pure as the freshly fallen snow. The wolf was loved by many creatures. It ...

Thank you. I've both seen this and experienced it myself, so it wasn't a hard topic to write about. Although, writing it from Shaun's perspective kinda surprised me. It seems ...

okay...first of all, it was pretty good and I enjoyed reading it. I have some suggestions though. I think if you were to come up with a better title, it ...

This seems more like a vague outline of a good poem. It was a bit hard to follow and it didn't really flow well. I think you should use what ...