faith

This was highly enjoyable.

I like the fact that you worked in myspace and...the entire poem was like a non sequitor. or I'm just stoned.Eyes too pretty for pictures is probably approaching chiche country. ...

The poem is being said by a speaker who is jealous of the apparent ease with which another poet spins metaphors and words with apparent ease. And I like that; ...

Someone once told me that the apocalypse will be blue, and that the saddest day of our lives is when we look into the mirror and know our own eyes. ...

You're starting to sound a touch like Brad. This is a great improvement from some of your earlier poetry. It flows well throughout and ends strongly.

Pretty and sophisticated. I particularly liked the beginning and: But we are acquiescent, passive to raining hellfire and dead synapses. probably because I'm a neuropsychology freak and I like the ...

I want your words, but I don't want to pay. Let me pick apart your syntax and sew it back up like a curious child and an unfortunate frog. I ...

Hmmm, I quite liked this. Great images, (e.g. 'pale pink face of hunger') a strong theme throughout from beginning to end. Nice ending too.

The way that it half-rhymed threw me off a little. Also I think you needed to introduce the snowglobe earlier since it's the central image in your poem. The first ...

Your dialogue could use some tightening up, but this: “I wouldn’t stand so close to me,” Donny said. “God’s got too many things against me for it to be safe.” ...

because i haven't been a cam whore in far too long:

I don't know about my ultimate top ten ever but some good ones that i've read fairly recently: The Jungle, Upton Sinclair The Man Who Mistook His Wife for a ...

Jane Doe #21532323 lies naked on the table before us. Her eyes are closed, the coroner explains, because they will always be the exact shade of someone we know. A ...

Better, but too personal. To the casual observer, many of your images don't connect. Not as charming a tactic as it seems. The seperate phrases and images were nice, they ...

If someone's publishing that... a lot. This is like a twinkie, it's all puffy and nice but there's really nothing there. And in large doses it probably causes cancer. It's ...