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I think this one maintained a certain elegance throughout, and the second person wasn't quite such a slap in the face as it often is. But it still has those ...

Adolescent males drive me insane. The first stanza was interesting. Your poems would benefit so much from never invoking the second person. And staying universal instead of crashing down to ...

The poem was missing a few things for me, such as several italicizedstreamsof consciousnessmadeextraspecialbytheirlackoflinebreaks , preferably invoking a metaphor of a bird with broken wings/a café

Oh my goodness...it's Robby! I don't frequent this site too often myself anymore, but how could I forget the acerbic Senor Sauerkraut from TYWC? About the poem...I'm not sure if ...

Around midnight we shut off the lights and left our fetal pigs to chill. We found an all night diner that smelled of formaldehyde and biscuits baking. I ordered coffee ...

Your poetry always has these great images that never really seem connected. You don't have to stick to one 'leitmotif' or whatever for the entire poem, but if you use ...

An exceptionally crude attempt at emotional manipulation. If you're going to to write about something as emotionally charged as a father killing his child, which you probably shouldn't because almost ...

I'd say it's both. It was written for cat, who I had for 16 years, who was euthanized a few days ago. edit: heh, 'for' my if he's going to ...

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no criticism until the final stanza- 'because everyone knows' seems out of place, disrupts the flow...for some reason it sounds like more than 10 syllables, even though it's not...perhaps because ...

The beginning completely intrigued me, because starting in the middle of a sentence is hot...and the phrasing of that first stanza was spot-on. Sparse and effective. Second stanza started out ...

*gigglesnort* And that's all I have to say.

you fight everything with such futile grace, like a moth beating its wings against a lighted window. in the back room of a locked ward of a hospital built for ...

I'm so pleased...this was hardly whiny at all. This didn't have any glitteringly beautiful imagery (and you know how I love imagery) but it had, as did your other recent ...

Ah, the old Brad is back (yes that's a good thing....sort of). As long as your whininess doesn't transcend into AIM conversations, it's very pretty.