fading-dream

Telle, I appreciate what you are doing for your friends, but that's their story and not yours. Don't write other peoples. Tell them to write their own if they want ...

Thanks for the comments. I agree with EVERYTHING. I actually had the thought to make Shannon cry and the tear would save them in a burst of blinding light. It ...

Thanks for the kind words Busheldood! I really appreciate your input. I agree, there are TONS of holes left in the story. I actually intentionally did this so that I ...

Lilicia got most of what I wanted to say. I really liked this story. I love that the characters are flawed. I found the description of killing the boy a ...

Beast Shannon slammed her mountain of books down on the table. Amy and Drew looked up with reddened eyes obviously deprived of sleep. The library was crowded that day, as ...

LastPaladin, that book sounds really good! I want to read Monster! Anyway, I'm going to say Huckleberry Finn. I was terrified to have to pick up that awful thing again. ...

You say that short stories don't settle well, but my logic is that a novel is a series of short stories. The ONLY difference is that you give more background ...

Prepare to be blown away by cheesiness! ----------------------------------------------- The building was nearly completely gone. Carlos stood at the edge of the property watching the flames dancing ab

Hi i'm BuzzBee I hope I can help! He leaves her there to rot alone Thus is the way he has always known I like this, it flows well and ...

This story was excellent, especially the title :) I have to say this felt rather like a fable. It's a rather simple story told in a wonderful way. It's something ...

Of Melody and Death The web of lies holds her there Eyes set course for a song to share She loves to watch the simple things Her death is vomit ...

You have captured what many authors fail at. The writing is not about capitalization and punctuation but about rhythm, feeling, flow. You have succeeded wonderfully. I love the metaphor and ...

HAHAHAHA! That was hilarious! The whole thing was just hilarious in general. Just to be sure, it was the wolf coming in at the end, right? I love the excuses. ...

Your story should fit the characters and not the other way around. That's the only advice I can give.

I thought this was an okay piece of literature, but it needs editing. The idea of it was super creepy and I felt disgusted after at what people can do. ...