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Re: A Lark on the Moon
I am on the Moon. No one can find me here To no atmosphere I adhere The chains of oxygen hewn The full Earth on the horizon The Brazilian coastal ...
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Re: Betrayal
Have you ever been in a situation where your friend was telling you a funny story about something that happened to her that you didn't really find funny, saying "You ...
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Re: Deader: Chapter One - Death
The idea for this is pretty interesting, but you're going too fast. The whole thing seems rather disjointed to me, it could stand a lot of ironing out. On the ...
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Re: So Innocent
Forward: This is a gay love story. Not my usual genre, I'll admit. Thanks for reading! “…increasing the child’s self-esteem. Thank you.” James Jenner concluded. The smattering of elementary sc
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Re: Poetry vs. Prose
Just call me Ariel. :smt002 Actually, the poem is a haiku, that's why the flow is a little awkward. I had a devil of a time trying to find a ...
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Re: Flimy (Personal Narrative)
Wow. I enjoyed that very much. It reads like the NY Times Bestseller you pick up at Books-A-Million simply because the little sign poking out of the table reads 'New ...
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Re: Poetry vs. Prose
Poetry fails me I'm a prose kind of person As you can gather.
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Re: Harmony, Part 1
The prologue gives a hint of something exciting, but that wasn't matched fully by the first part. The first paragraph was pure exposition, and personally, I don't like all the ...
Dec 9, 2009
