erratik_statik

lol clever i won't repeat the 20 ppl before me other to say.. i like your style... its fresh :-) Brendan

isn't it funny how this has the most comments out of all the poems i've read So what if it is s***? He admits it is s***... and waste of ...

You don't see much of this sort of stuff on here... I really like it. Its got a real grungy, industrial tone: perfect for the antiestablishment idea behind it. Gastric ...

Speed is anaesthetic, place your foot on the throttle While you drown yourself in cigarette smoke in a bottle. It lingers, the feel of her lips on your skin. An ...

I love a bit of dark er stuff and this is a very original poem. The metaphors you used and the way you mix up and cross over between make-up ...

Theme is great. and wow you are a talented wordsmith: your manipulation of the language and gymnastics with the pen is quite incredible. but... I think you may have overdone ...

wow. i'm a little taken aback at how much this poem struck a chord with me.. the theme hit home. Stunning: in a literal sense, not just as the overused, ...

I’m filled to the brim with emptiness, a shell without a soul A skeleton still rising, cheating the Earth of rationed breath Wishing, waiting, hoping, praying, dreaming of a cure ...

I really like this, again, but I think it could be tweaked a little.. I think you could reorder the first line: maybe 'Giant, silver, beautiful birds.' There is an ...

I havn't looked at this since I wrote it, so I didn't know there was so many errors! Thanks for fixing it up for me it sounds heaps better now. ...

that is sick man! i love these kinds of drawings, like with no focal point, no gravity, no physics etc. Its how people should think I believe: no limitations. :-) ...

i love reading poetry like this the rhythm is in the sort of chaos of the lengths and the lack of punctuation is great too. the metaphors you used were ...

Memory sweet memory You seek only to remind me Of blackened skies and acid rain Of gaping holes and inner pain Of cracks in walls and screams from beds Of ...

its gorgeous. i wish i knew a girl who could write something like that to a guy. it has a rare integrity to it for a specific love poem. most ...

i really like this, its a fresh style taking on an old issue. it really is a great metaphor that tells of the in and out nature of our moods... ...