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hey thanks guys... I've gotten rid of a lot of the caps and the profanity... the narrator has more of a chilling tone now: thanks for your suggestions :-) And ...

yer... I'm pretty sure I've seen it before too... there are a lot of dodgy things about that photo actually....

The cold breeze charged into the house, filling every recess and shadowy hollow. It was the only living occupant, the only breath that could be heard. The crisp air searched ...

From my pores they march; Coats red as rubies; hot as a breath Swarming together, converging on death To dry, arid winds and the afternoon sun Or a midnight uncertain, ...

Just remembered. "The Persimmon Tree" and the sequel: "Fishing For Stars" by Bryce Courtenay. Maybe a bit cliche-courtenay, but they really hook you in. Characters are done properly and the ...

haha most of these aren't even stupid... they're embarrassing, but not stupid my stupidity includes random boat on a random playground and a random girl luckily, the whole thing is ...

I think i get it... had to read it three times mind you... but I think that is what makes a good poem. It needs exploring, and is enriched because ...

mann.. i don't dig conventional romance novels, but hell i dig romance :-) I'm a hopeless romantic to the core. But I view love differently to conventional writers, as they ...

shinigamizm you are gorgeous.. i'm sure its been said before ayy? :-) and what does shinigamizm mean anyways??? anyways, here is me and stuffz my eyes are blue though, not ...

hahah this seems like fun. i rarely like nice girls... i like interesting girls... which can mean screw ups... emotional damage is always good but that's a personal thingg i ...

i would call this a really good raw beginning. The description is fantastic and such: but the theme seems too shallow... its a good one, and the metaphor fit it ...

I agree with Knightly... this is really good. It has the power to sort of suck the life out of you, leaves you empty, which makes it really powerful. Emptiness ...

wow this was really good :-) 2nd crack at it? You'll be hooked in no time... I rarely write anything else anymore :-). Rhyme was all good.. no issues there ...

this is sheer class. absolutely gorgeous. :-) but I 'spose you want something constructive... First paragraph: delete the 3 'what ifs' at the end: they cheapen and sort of fluff ...

Having absolutely no idea on photography I can't say much. But looking at these makes me think u r an absolute natural!!! these are really good... except the cow one ...