enzoguy15

It wasn't outstanding but it was pretty good. You made good points and you suppoted them, so good job. You made some punctuation mistakes and somwehre in the middle of ...

That is very odd

Maybe it would help if you punctuated the questions differently. "Is it that I'm blind, Blind to the world that surrounds me? What makes me so special, Why see what ...

Looking Down the Barrel. By: Josh G. It was this kind of day that you wish you never got out of bed. Parents used to tell me that this was ...

He fixed his tie, finished his drink, and then proceeded to with the disposal of the body. He left it in an alley, not too so different from where he ...

Hm, nicely written and detailed . I was a little confused at first, but that was quickly cleared up with the flashback thingies (can't think of a better word for ...

I think it was really great. There were only a few problems that I came across. One was punctuation. Somewhere in there after a short sentence, (about 15-20 words long), ...

Rory, I believe right now, you concentrate on too many ideas, which doesn't let any of them be developed that great. My suggestion is you limit yourself to one or ...

Really good start I enjoyed it. But work with the characters a little more. I would like to read more.

Very nice job kid. The thing is it did not flow all that well. just tweak it a little and it will be great.

Like the Saint Razorblade stated it 10,000 every six days. What I do is 10,000 a week. :)

Please redo you need to reformat

very good!

A. G.entle B.reeze By: Joshua G. Dedicated to A.G.B. ‘don’t ever give up hope.’ When I first saw her, time stopped. Nothing else mattered when I was with her. Her ...

Very good.