empressoftheuniverse

I really enjoyed this piece. I can't think of much else to say, it was well-written and I don't think it needs excessive punctuation, I tend to like poems that ...

Nitpicks: Slowly I stood up and walked drowsily toward my closet. This seems a little redundant, but maybe it's just the use of two adverbs. Try something like Slowly I ...

His golden - like complexion, hair like fall, I read this and smiled, because my first thought was, "hair like fall? What does that even mean?" And then I remembered ...

Maybe my head is screwed on backwards, but I totally get this. The narrator is talking directly to us, right? And then he's telling us about his woes. From that ...

Constantly feeling the same; vulnerable and hopeless. Like your soul isn’t even there. Your body is moving, but you mind is trapped in the past. So oblivious, but when you ...

Thanks Mr. Knightley. When I wrote it, I was thinking of things that went on ceramic dishes, but when I looked back at it I thought, "Really, that's the best ...

Ben-- chapter one and prologue done. Still working on chapter two.

Okay, I thought I reviewed this but.. I guess not. :/ I read it, at any rate. Random Nitpicks/ Things that annoy me “Well, Mr. Fuck you, if you don’t ...

This..uncontrolled disaster of disire desire The cresant moon fills your heart with sadness crescent Those eyes of his, once so loving Now tearing away at your heart, mind, and soul ...

I really like this poem; it had that sad, nostalgic feel to it, about a guy whose ideas and visions seem to not fit the changing world. I also liked ...

I'm pretty sure this is supposed to be a random, spasmodic, whimsical piece about fruit. And I felt it did have a sort of choppy, innate rhythm to it. I ...

I understand the bit about jumping off the cliff, but why does the person in question cut themselves with a shard of glass? I understand that it's something you do ...

I agree that instead of giving us a laundry list of traits, you should try instead to personify those things with simile, metaphor, and personification. Or at least throw images ...

Hello. I have to say I'm a sucker for acrostic poems and Obama, so when you put the two together, well... That's pretty fabulous. You have some slightly forced lines, ...

Dark oblivian stares cruely back at me. White powder snow covers chokes, smothers, stifles... the ground in a deadly blanket I understand it's a twist on "blanket of snow" but ...