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At first, I thought I didn't understand this poem but when I reread it, I saw that the metaphor was really ingenious. I don't really have any critiques; but I ...

I do actually feel like this is a little too personal. I can't imagine what it felt like to write, but it was very difficult to read something that was ...

The kind of song you want to make love to Even under a shit sky, if there ever was one If there ever is one. Slick roads crack when it ...

A few nitpicks first: My father was killed in a car wreak three years, and we still haven't moved on. I think you mean My father was killed in a ...

This is an interesting poem in that it shows us what other countries think of America. I would, if I were you, try to emphasize the idea of this being ...

The look in her eyes as she shines and as she gleams Possibly change this to The look in her eyes as she shines, as she gleams because it's a ...

Hey, I was wondering if you could read my poem Lust I feel like it needs a lot of work, especially since right now it's a weird cross between prose ...

Hey I did already take a look at this poem but I don't really have anything to say except that I agree wholeheartedly with everything you wrote. Love saved him ...

When he walks down the hall I stop and inhale, his scent. It is old spice and locker rooms and the clean cotton of his shirt. Today it’s blue. He ...

The first thing I would do is get rid of the intro. I don't know why, but if you start with all sorts of disclaimers it just gets the reader ...

This was really beautifully written. I love the imagery, especially in the second stanza, and I love the way you put a new twist on a love story by making ...

Basically the first half was totally beautiful. I just have a few nitpicks: All of the bodies at night are obtained That felt like a bit of a stretch. Pain ...

I don't know what this new fad is for writing this in the second person. I've never seen it in a book, only occasionally in published poems. So for some ...

This has a lot of good imagery, but it is too long. I've read prose before that's been converted into poetry, and this reads like that. You take too long ...

Nowhere to escape to now, not even one comfortable safe place Hey, I really like the gist of your poem; how it sort of relates to the title but doesn't ...