empressoftheuniverse

I agree with Kryollac about the rhyming scheme; but that's pretty much how I rhyme and I kind of like it. It goes with the theme of the poem; being ...

Mackenzie, if you ever mosey over to my thread here, I'm working on your story. Not too quickly, because you still haven't told me how you want it sent to ...

Sounds painful :xd: Thanks for sharing the wisdom, rosey. I guess I have a lot of work ahead of me...

This was magnificent, Becki! Can I call you Becki? I loved the use of second person; it was well-executed, so say the least. And the emotions evoked were very powerful. ...

Hey Becki! First thing's first, tell us about yourself. What do you like to write? What's your favorite movie/band/color/book? What do you want to be when you grow up? If ...

First of all, welcome! And you may want to put an eye-catching title on your piece, and put that it's your first post in the body of the work. Anyways, ...

I thought it was fast-paced, light in a dark sort of way and fun in a devious manner. I don't think it leaves too much to question-- he is planning ...

My hearts aches to see you walk away Then my tears fill me eyes When I know that you want to walk away Hello! This stanza can be eliminated. if ...

I really, really love the idea. I feel like its a night in december as I read this. Beautiful. However... Ysabel: Do not worry, my world is that of flower ...

I love the idea; some parts were a little repetitive. Deep inside a wishing well; A light shining the traveler's way. Even though never seen. Nor never touched. It was ...

A new year has begun another new day another rising sun Many new thoughts many new hopes this coming year has brought Coming to Finding new conclusions after this past ...

I am a total newbie at poetry, but I really, really loved this piece. haggling for their daily bread and selling their souls for anything that glitters. I am enchanted ...

Hello Kat Train? Remember me, the obnoxious person who critiqued your critique :roll: Yeah, I get a little carried away sometimes. Anyways, Hands, cracked and caked with life, love, and ...

I think you did a fantastic job. It has beautiful imagery with meaning, great rhythm and rhymes that don't feel like they struggled or deterred from the subject matter or ...

I think we all know that Emo has traveled far from the abbreviation of emotional; that doesn't mean anything in this discussion. And free verse poetry, from what I understand--- ...