empressoftheuniverse

I really like the line Oh, Christmas tree how I loath you and your dear perfection. I love the way you paralleled loathe and dear perfection. I also like the ...

Hello rebel! Nice to bump into you here :smt001 (really lame at starting critiques) well then, unto the fun part. I really liked the ideas you had in this. I ...

I also really like this poem. I always wonder about cliche words in poetry because when I see them in a poem like this I wonder if the writer is ...

It felt a little repetitive. Yes, it painted a beautiful picture of yearning in the reader but it was essentially the same image, over and over. She wants winter--now, she's ...

I hate to disagree with the poetry god above me but.. I kind of like that. And by poetry gods I don't mean in caustic or sarcastic sense but truly ...

I also really enjoyed this piece. I wish I could write but I cant define the feelings inside roaming in my mind This part has a different rhyme scheme than ...

I agree with Mighty Mistress Snoink. I would describe it as telling, not showing. You're giving us words and thoughts, not evoking emotions and images to summon thoughts of our ...

This is a really great piece. I don't like how sometimes you rhymed with "Yep, that's what they will be" and sometimes you didn't. I also don't understand the need ...

Okay, I liked this piece. The emotion, the way its presented was pretty good. There are some things amiss with the rhythm, however. And it's because you're using a lot ...

I really like this poem, caged heart. It has to be my favorite of the ones that I've read. I shall always remember. I think this would be better as ...

as real as a dream of a thing I have done, just a figment. This line feels a little superfluous. I'm rolling along into the beginning, enjoying the sights, smells ...

I'd bless the fool who'd call it grace. I'd curse myself should I attempt a mend. No, some loss is needed. Some loss is wanted. All loss becomes emptiness. Blasphemy ...

Hello there, I like this poem. As previous people mentioned it flows nicely and rhymes well. I would say nix the exclamation point at the end. Also, though I know ...

I would say no elipses, in the poem or the title. It just looks odd, to me. That was a cute piece of poetry; I did enjoy it. THe rhyming ...

I just now realized that your profile picture is a book. This whole time I thought it was a flower. :roll: Anyways... Taught to learn, love, work - Taught to ...