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Re: God and Apple Blossoms
Wow. That was a beautiful poem; great use of imagery. I love this poem, and though It's obviously about God it doesn't come off sounding preachy; but more like a ...
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Re: Be Not My World
Be just us against the world. This ruins the power of your last stanza, which I consider the most beautiful I know someone already mentioned this, but no harm in ...
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Re: Jacob's Ladder
That was beutiful. Especially the first line Words play like children in a street- like sacrificial lambs. DId anyone else get the image of dictionaries with lamb feet playing jump ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: Forever Gone
Hello Janay! I will be reviewing your poem for you today. :D And here I must stay. Like the clouds in the sky, I am slowly turning grey. My only ...
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Re: Never Won
Why can't I get over you? I want to move on to something new. I would say nix this line. Of course I agree with everyone above, that you should ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: My Requiem
I feel nothing but the frosty touch of silver twilight's kiss. This isn't even a nitpick, just my own warped opinion. I don't like the use of silver before twilight. ...
Jan 7, 2010 -
Re: The lioness
She tore your heart out Like a lion ripping, And tearing at that spot For hours upon hours. I like this, but I think it could be a little more ...
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Re: With You
I don’t know why, when everybody’s hating me, When darkness is all I can see, When I am drowning in hatred’s sea, I find love, just by sitting with you, ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Chocolate Dawn
Hello chocolate, loved you poem, absolutely loved it. One little nitpick: The lava marks the night, bleeds its vanilla icicles stained of red that scars the milky way. I really ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: PEZ
I'm thinking that this is a form of sabotoge for us lyrical poetry reviewers... but oh well. Here I go. Please let some stranger secretly buy me a huge box ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: In the mood for a review, per chance?
another one in Lyrical Poetry (don't tell me you won't know what you're talking about. You rock.) called Ode to Snoink (We are) You are the best reviewer ever. EVER. ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Reviewer Testimonials
Xirena is a poetry godess :) I am very, very, very happy with her work. if you have poetry, GO TO HER.
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Our Love is like the Rain.
We become taken over, our lives now one, And the sun disappears as we are taken over by a storm. don't really like these lines. But you need them when, ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Because of Your Grace
The sound of Your voice, Is just above all noise. It demands urgency, and a sense of intimacy. The miracle of Your touch, Is just amazing to watch. Millions of ...
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: Summer wishes
I'ved loved everything I've seen of yours so far, Fixed. Summers come and summers go. Before and after our winter snow. But I still love the bright sun's glare, the ...
Jan 6, 2010
