empressoftheuniverse

A silhouette of you, I see. My heart’s as happy as it can be I ask “Did you yearn for me too?” And you answer “Yes and I still do.” ...

I agree with Ollie. While this doesn't pertain to the song as much as it could, it felt very true-to-you in some spots. Though in others, it did feel a ...

dianne cleaned up all the grammatical stuffs, which means less work for me. :) It's reading till 2AM try this It's reading until two a.m. Besides that, and comments above ...

I agree with others that the line "My heart feels love touch" is a bit awkward, and it should be chaged with some method above^ especially since those two lines, ...

That was really beautiful. I liked the use of the word dark, actually. It was a nice mixture of lofty words and common ones. This is an amazing poem-- I'm ...

Hello, Pacific Sky Hate to sound bossy and all but there is a forum specifically for lyrics; and if you want your poem put there you can ask a moderator ...

I loved the style and imagery in this poem; it was absolutely breathtaking. Great job. Normally I don't like poetry with strings of questions in them, but this was pulled ...

I remember the bright shine, raining down from the street lights. As I drove down Corpus, along the ocean side. It was gettign getting colder again. We bearly barely knew ...

Hello, colorful, I would say ask some more people to review your writing because it's not fair that it just sits here without any comments. So I'm changing that now. ...

So difficult to fight with the lusty sin getting into my human mortal nature, overpowering my soul and leaving no chance for repenting. I would say if the vertical word ...

That was really beautiful, and rife with imagery. I'm sure your friend would be proud of this piece. It was, obviously, full of depression and melancholy but they felt like ...

I much enjoyed the rhyming scheme, actually. And the rhythm was pretty good, as well. She's covered in filth every day With something to look forward to Glad to have ...

And if life happens to hand you a challenge, That you go the extra mile. good line, try this instead: And if life hands you a challenge, You go the ...

I agree wholeheartedly with Snoink. And unknown poet--- :( June is one of the most helpful poetry-critiquers on this site; and she didn't say anything to dismiss or discourage KayDee. ...

This was a beautiful poem.. fantastic job. One question: why isn't is called Knowing? That seems to be the subject matter here. Oh, and I agree with everyone above. Too ...