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*will review this piece on the weekend.*

thank you day dream. Awesome story idea, can't wait to see what happens. :)

Hey Day dream, your comment made me happy. :) Don't know what reviews you read of mine but I'm glad they pleased you. Your idea is fabulous. Usually when people ...

Oscar freaking Wilde read Ballad of Reading Gaul and Sphinx also the book Best Poems in the English Language by Harold Bloom hope that helped XD

know one has ever been true. no one until I am 6ft.beneath the ground six feet Besides that, it was a pretty good piece. Your rhyming scheme was nice, and ...

I take it your a mother? I wish my mom wrote me poetry. This was so sweet, when it started I thought "another love poem? Please don't let someone break ...

The un-read books begin to swell, the pages rot and start to smell. I’m sorry but this course just ain’t romancing me getting its kicks from kicking the sense out ...

You've left me all alone I don't even know why you should take out this line; it's a little overused and the last sentence doesn't flow as well. Also, you ...

I agree with the person above about changing around the structure of the stanzas so they flow nicer. Also, I love the vertical stanza at the end. It was an ...

I say eliminate the beginning and elaborate the end. She stood mid-embrace broken and hurt. Tears streaming down her face, hugging those who’d heard. They took him away, and she ...

Prepare your arms for many embrace, This should probably be "many an embrace" to keep your rhyming scheme intact; because normally you would right this as many embraces. Besides that, ...

I thought this was an amazing poem, especially for your first one. Wow :D Great job! I do agree with person above, though. You didn't get to examining the elements ...

I definitely get the idea you're going for, and the emotions, but like you said above yourself, it's a little ambiguous. Which isn't a bad thing, but the story of ...

This is rather simplistic. So I will smile for a while And let my heart rejoice with wine Then watch my enemies cry through the night this led on to ...

Floods your senses, burns your mark Mark? a lot of things rhyme with dark-- shark, hark lark, spark, bark, stark... maybe reword this with a different phrase. Do they, could ...