empressoftheuniverse

And those of you who are dying Where are the promised medicines And to your mortgage payables Could you still stomach the illusions Bedazzling your eyes into chaos Awesome group ...

I kind of agree with purple pastel. Also, the purple font is kind of unnecessary. The poem is neat enough (and hard enough to decipher XD) as itis, with black ...

I kind of agree with silent. While your asking where it went, maybe describe where you've looked for it (in a metaphorical, symbolic sense) and what it meant to you ...

I'm so sorry this went for so long unnoticed.. it makes me sad. But I found it now. It was a cute, whimsical poem that made me want to have ...

Hello oza, this poem seems to be suffering from the same condition as a number of your other poems; over-wordiness. Don't be afraid to cut out the fat so you ...

I agree with kamas. Swings bring to mind an image of elgs flailing, arms pumping and children squealing. Great use of verbs here, and it could stand to be a ...

I like the structure of this poem, the short, edgy lines give it a bit of a rougher, more emotional feel. And the language is masterfully simplistic. . That It’ll ...

I found this poem quaint and beautiful. I liked the words that you used in your rhyme Our words stuttered madly, we both choked on tears It felt more like ...

I agree with Durrance, however I think this piece would be nicer if you hinted more at emotions in this stanza I am from a world of rejection Of pain, ...

I actually thought this poem was quite brilliant. Sad and depressing, yes, but utterly wonderful besides that. The streaks on my cheeks No one can see I wear no mascara ...

But we became fools This feels like an uninspired rhyme. Try something else here. Wild has came with the tile Teenager tile- title unless I misunderstood the sentence. Besides that, ...

five months we shared But it never felt Like you really cared Every time you held Me in your arms I couldn’t see pass All your charm this moved so ...

It was really, really depressing. With not all that much insight. I understand that you want a creative release but you know what goes hand-in-hand with creativity? Individuality, and though ...

When I first read it, I admit that I thought it an imaginative love story; and therefore pretty decent. When I read your post about it being about anorexia nervosa, ...

I hate to be the weird one and disagree with everyone above me but.. I think the length is fine. It felt like the poem was over and there was ...