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Oh please paint me love I don’t know what it looks like 'I don't know what it looks like' seems out of place there. I think it's just the way ...

The tone for this is fitting for the poem and it goes along nicely. Some parts, however, it is a little rough, like this stanza: I make you commendable, Demeanor ...

It's written beautifully... but you should really space it out into paragraph form. It's difficult to read when it's like this. All I have to say is watch out for ...

Yeah... I'm pretty much jealous of you now... :) This line kind of disrupted the mindset of it when I read it: (Which I’ve won, mind you) But... wow... there's ...

The most trouble I ran across this poem was reading it. The rhythm was slightly off, so it was hard to read with flow. Some lines I stumbled over because ...

Yeah... I can kind of feel the message of the poem right now... But anyway, I felt this poem was extremely broken. It seemed like you placed all that you ...

47% of users on this site are apparently neither... or so the stats say I worry about that 47%... Hey... don't mess with us. ;)

Wow, thanks for all the nice comments! :oops: I really appreciate it.

Thanks for reading and commenting on this. I changed it with some of the suggestions you made (like hand by hand... oops :)).

Whoo. Grif's poetry. ;) So yea, my two cents on it... So I was brought towards my fate, I thanked the lord for what I got, for the maw could ...

our silhouettes could guide us, all on their own, beneath the lights. as we walk side by side, hand in hand, there's no one outside here to trust, since we'd ...

It'd be better both for the adults and for the teens. The adults won't have to put up with teenagers who will, inherently, talk a lot. The teens won't have ...

haha I get it. The Tell-Tale Heart by Poe, right? I found it funny. It took me a minute to get it, but yeah. You don't have to give me ...

Well, maybe you fit YOUR stereotype, but not every single Jewish person is just like you. Also, not every stereotype is very friendly. Some stereotypes are annoying, biased, and make ...

I think stereotypes are stupid... I mean, you should like what you like. Why do you have to label everyone? Stereotyping just prevents people from being themselves. Some people are ...