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They gave us the new SAT tests, essays included.

Hehehe. I got like a 1760 on the SAT. I know, I'm a genious. I did to pretty well on Critical Reading... but I failed at Math... I'm so proud!

preference, for one thing or another, there's nothing i can do to change yours. spontaneous jealousy, appearing when you're just around the corner, at the routine rounds you make, stopping ...

There was a typo: "Where the oor is sober" I think you mean poor. It wasn't really my type of poetry, but it was written fine.

That sucks! I hope it all works out for you...

I didn't really like the parentheses at the end, especially the last one. It was okay, besides that.

Your poetry will develop the more you read other peoeple's works. Critique will help you a lot and the more you write, the easier it will come. I suggest reading ...

You had "read on" in your prologue and you mentioned "we." I'm assuming you have that throughout your whole story, this mysterious narrator? Here's a grammatical error that bugged me: ...

The beginning seemed to imply that the father was the one to die, or it seemed so to me, anyway. Then the scene with the mother coming into the girl's ...

"Weddings are loving" Loving? Do you mean lovely? It seemed like you were trying to write a fun, little kid poem. The rhyming was a big contributor to that. I ...

I personally enjoyed this, especially the way you wrote it, the format and all. Some sentences that confused me: "He wonders if he did just impulsively jump if they’d care, ...

The capitalization in front of every line bugged me, but that's your style. The poem itself was hurried, yet that sets the mood of the poem. I liked it.

It was really difficult to read, since you had almost no punctuation to direct the reader. Also, some adjectives didn't see very necessary, and it kind of made the poem ...

YoshiArmada has a cool quote in his signature

ahem.. since SK didn't really compliment... Nickelpickle has a nice avatar. And SK is a great friend to get all my hyperness out on! :D