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i think there's another section for this, since this isn't an actualy story. but anyway... maybe this will be more understandable when written. i'm not a huge fan of science ...

well, the ending... i don't know exactly why you put that there. it's not supposed to be part of the story, is it? anyway, from what it seems, this isn't ...

i like it mesh! i don't know what you're talking about. i'm sure crysi would be proud to publish it. =) on the blue-green afternoon gold of a summer night ...

hey, i wrote this poem awhile ago and i redid a lot of it, mostly to your comments. let me know what you think about the changes. thanks! Envious thief- ...

hey jig! nice story so far. i'm horrible at critiquing... but the only part i want to know a bit more about is this Deep Scout. its physical appearance, mostly. ...

aww... this was sad. i like the tone you wrote this with. it brought out the emotions of the poem. i liked the poem overall. sometimes, the rhythm seemed a ...

you had a lot of different and original imagery, which is really good. a lot of people stick to ones that have been circulated a little too many times. now, ...

i know you're all out there. well, okay. so i wrote this song for my friend for their birthday and i'd like to sing it to them. i don't want ...

haha wow. these comment are way late, but.. eh whatever. ari- aww that's so cute! i got my first corsage recently too, but now it's wilting. haha oh well. you ...

thanks for the comments. sorry about that line. it is confusing... i think i don't really make it clear but it's kind of a connection of alcohol and "love" (or ...

i don't give criticism. i give feedback. we shouldn't even be having this posted everywhere. "PM". but get over yourself and offyour high horse. seriously.

cherry wine thunders through my head, beating the seconds as i inch toward delight. a blood tinted sky waits with me. the sun pushes through, though heaven tries to hold ...

emo-ness is fun. =) well, anyway, the poem had a lot of interesting questions in it. however, it seemed like you focused more on the way the questions sounded than ...

i'm sorry that you feel this way, but i think your approach to this poem could have been more subtle. instead of revealing why you are sad about christmas, convey ...

the poem that you have here seems much more like a list. you tell the reader what children of philosophy are, but you say it over and over again in ...