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"now her tears fall unnoticed " The unnoticed was kind of weird.. I don't know, it didn't seem necessary to me. The poem was really nicely written and I liked ...

^ is a really kind person that puts up with me talking to her at random times :)

Yeah... it was dripping in sarcasm, the whole thing. I don't know if anyone caught that... Thanks for the comments, anyway.

Howdy, Inertia! I'll join your site thing, except the people on there intimidate me... lol...

I still say the guys should post some of their pics... Let's see, who are we waiting for now?

Geez, Sureal, that sounds dirty too. :roll: Don't worry, I'll kick myself.

"I'm afraid. " "I stuggle." "i cry loudly " "i manage to get away." These four lines seemed very blunt to me. I suggest finding better words to replace the ...

^ is confused about the show. Maybe she's talking about your avatar.

Well, it's not good to over-post, either, like having 6 poems/stories in the same day. Also, lots of people only get 1 or 2 reviews. That's all right, I suppose, ...

Hi. I'm Janice. Not a particularly interesting beginning. I'm probably biased, though, because I don't like stories that start with and introduction right away. My friends and I were sitting ...

All right. I might seem really picky and not right with my critique but here it is... She didn’t have to wake up for a whole other hour. I think ...

You speeded through a great deal of the character's life, so the reader has no connections with the character. I suggest rewriting this again, making more detail in each event ...

I think this is more of a narrative poem. The format was a little weird and some of the lines were choppy. It was okay, besides that.

"Instead I find a sleeping world " Shouldn't it be "I found a sleeping world"? The poem was kind of short, but it still seemed complete. I thought the shortness ...

"All becomes nothing and nothing becomes you " Maybe you could break this line up. It's really up to you if you want to keep the pattern there, but I ...