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The imagery was excellent and the different repetition within the poem was properly used to stress the poem. Nice job.

You definitely need to add things into this.

I know this is no help at all but... This is awesome. You deserve something...

Haha... I like that response... ooh i love your hair. it it dyed? No it's not dyed... and yes I am asian. Nice to see you again, YoshiArmada, and Bob ...

This is really beautiful.. I'm not playing the sympathy card either... this honestly is really awesome. I especially like the second part of it. Very nice.

:roll: Yeah, me... the sideview part of my head anyway...

I've read a couple of your poems and I noticed that you like to give lots of imagery.. however I don't think it's all necessary. I think you stretched this ...

Persephone of the underwo, I'm sorry you had a hard time at school, but frankly I think this was pretty mediocre writing. For one thing, it was a bit blunt. ...

Description was very good in this. I thought the third stanza was a bit over the top, but that's just me.

I can't really imagine this as a song... It's a bit too sarcastic, I guess, for songs... The 'misfire!' repetition kind of made the song seem jolly, even though it's ...

there is a pale of water in my basement Do you mean 'pail' or do you really mean 'pale'? Seriously, I can't tell... This seemed like a personal poem, yet ...

Okay... I swore I would never tell anyone, but I guess I will now... on a public website. Ironic, eh? Well, I used to cut. For bad reasons like being ...

A release, maybe? I know how you feel. It's too short for me to really comment on, though.

This was very different from a lot of poems. Typo: "Where are you off to, red baloon?" Balloon. I liked it. However, it didn't seem very complete, like it was ...

This didn't seem to have much depth in it. You seemed to be describing something, but not with things that you felt, so it seemed sort of distant.