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i've got to agree again. while the poem is complex and nice, it seems as if you are trying too hard to spruce up the poem with complicated words. i ...

hmm... i'm sure al would like this. =P what bothered me was your overconcentration of trying to dedicate this poem to this al character. you seemed desperate to include specific ...

i have to second crysi in the lack of helpful critique and the wow-ness of this. beautiful poem. profound message. keep on writing. please. =)

i think there were some things which you could have done a lot with. however, a lot of what you wrote was slightly cliche. one of those swept under the ...

narrative poetry does have an objective point to poetry. however... it doesn't mean that you can simply make the poem rhyme, aloof, and medieval and call it narritive poetry. it ...

just a suggestion, but maybe... So sleep in peace and worry not, Preserve your integrity, But keep it known as I have shown, Eloquence is wasted on me." i don't ...

granted, but the rest of your days at work will be living hell. i wish the cold spring weather would go away.

i like the poem you have now- you have a lot to offer for it. at the same time, though, it seems as if you run on your own train ...

hey! i remember you! you were one of the first people to comment on my poems! okay, that's a selfish way of looking it... but welcome back!!

yay liz! you have returned! although, i'm not really sure what you are saying here. it seems like a poem only you truly know, but it's something i still like ...

as this style of poetry, i think the poem is pretty good. now because it is a more focused on rhythm and rhyme, i think you should read the poem ...

aww... sad. but i like it. the first stanza was my favorite, mostly because there was no point-blank explanation needed, yet it remained poetic. in the second stanza, you started ...

there's not really much that you're saying, so i guess there isn't really much to say about it. i don't know... what exactly do you want us to do with ...

there is a lot in this poem. a lot that you are expressing. to be honest, i got a little bored by the middle of it because of its length ...

i think what a lot of people tend to do is only critique people they know/are friends with/are "popular" i don't know. if you look at all the unanswered posts, ...