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Just one grammar thing: Why do you look at me with such disgust in your eyes (metaphorically speaking) when I have said nothing, done nothing that could possibly be construed ...

Hehe... I'm going to nitpick small errors because I can... even if they already make sense... :D The one that pops into mind right now is one you told us ...

I agree with what the others have said so far. It seemed much more like a cute little poem that you read in chain letter emails...

The ending made me sad :(, but yeah, nice job.

A bit grotesque, not that that is bad. Chilling... reminded me of a book I read recently. I must say it... I really liked it, especially the third and fourth ...

I don't really have a suggestion for the last line, but... I thought this was all right, but too rushed. Maybe you could organize it better so that it wouldn't ...

It was a bit confusing... Some grammatical and spelling errors. The story was rushed, too. Maybe more description would make it less confusing. Here are your first two sentences. So ...

There are a lot of grammatical and spelling errors in the story, making it incredibly hard to read and follow the plot. Here are some examples: Tears turned to anger ...

I know it's much to late too were things can start again. where It was a bit rushed, so it was hard to get anything from it. I sort of ...

This line confused me: I went to burn on of your pictures I get the jist of it, but the actual lines of the poem make it all the more ...

It was a little hard to read, but I liked it once I figured out how it was supposed to be read. With its infernal, hated pounding in my mind, ...

There were some spelling errors and the rhyme was a bit weird, but it was simple in a way that made you like it. Basically whatever Boni_Bee already said.

All right. I take my comment back. Canadians are not Americans in the least. I'm sorry I insulted you and all Canadians everywhere. I didn't know my statement was incorrect ...

Rei, I was being slightly sarcastic. Canadians are Americans because Canada is located in North America. That's what I meant.

I have talked to Canadians... some go to my school. And which statement are you referring to?