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Hmm. I think I felt that at some parts; could you be more specific or was it just a general thing? Eh. Now that I re-read it, I can't really ...

It seems just started and not yet revised. Not that that's a bad thing, but there were some mistakes... like your unfinished last sentence. :) I think you should really ...

Since I didn't read the first one, I had to go all the way back to read that one... geez Ari! :) (Seriously, though, the other one was awesome! A ...

I know a girl who really loves music and loves playing her cello. She is extremely good at playing and is very serious about it too, so I know what ...

Okay. There were some parts that bugged me. She smiled and said, "Beauty on the outside is decided by what other people look nice." That sentence didn't really make sense. ...

heh The ending was kind of surprising. But it was so nice to read...

I think it's a little rushed. One thing leads to another rather quickly and without some explanation. It's a little too confusing right now to be really engrossed in. You ...

The truth of the matter is, it's the girl's decision. You can pamper her all you want with compliments and love. Maybe she will feel good about herself and stop ...

I don't feel as if they're broadcasting it. They're looking for support from others like them. It doesn't seem like they are forcing people to view their views, but just ...

I don't really see anything wrong with it... I don't find it disgusting or weird or crazy. If that's how you want to live, then live that way.

Hmm.. interesting. It seemed a bit more like a short prose. Yeah, it's narrative, but narrative poems still have flow and rhythm. Most poems have structure too. Not only does ...

Hurray for Strats. I have a Strat too. Here's my picture that I'll share to you all... :roll:

I don't see any words... I was going to praise you about how pretty the photograph was. Then I saw your note. :D It'd be pretty cool if you enhanced ...

To me, it just felt like a string of similar words... but I guess that's what poetry really is, right? I didn't really like it because it just seemed like ...

It seemed a tad bit like a child talking back to his mother about how he is right and she is wrong. Not sure if you were going for that ...