emmylou1995

As I pm-ed Peanutgallery007, these are called American haiku's. They do not follow that 5 7 5 rule. That is a Japanese haiku. An American haiku has less than sixteen ...

Thanks for all the help guys! I will start to fix it up as soon as i am free. That will not be for a while. I have so much ...

Here are some of my haikus. Will you please give me advice?! #1 midsummer the fresh wood scent of the lumberyard #2 mid afternoon the scent of lilacs hidden by ...

These are nice. Here is my advice. #1 A child laughs as A tree sways in the wind. and Deer drink the water I think this should be... trees sway ...

I won second place in your The Note Read...contest. Here are my 5 works for you to review. Hope you like them.

Is this good or does it need work? Hiding in the darkness From the evil one Here she comes around the corner I take off and run. Through the maze ...

Oona sat among the tall blades of grass of the bright, green Irish countryside. She looked into the dark gray sky, tears fell down her cold cheeks. Her home is ...

I held her lifeless body in a stiff and bloody embrace. The cannons drowned out my mourning cries. I leaned over her face and kissed her cold lips. Such a ...

I liked this a lot. It was nice and flowed well at most points. Just like Pippiedooda said the second sentace saying you would tell us her story confused me. ...

This was interesting. I think you should put less detail and drama in the beginning chapter. It seems overdramatic. Draw out the Dying of Melissa and the news of the ...

I like this a lot. It was intense and dark, in a way. Same things as Saphirra and The One Who is Awesome said, though. Space out your paragraphs and ...

Thanks everyone! I want to ask you, can I use some of the sentances you gave me? They're good. I was not sure if you guys would call that stealing ...

Thanks for all the feedback. I can not figure out what to write for that last line. My problem is that I need it to rhyme with the word cold. ...

I did not realize this was such a powerful poem. Thanks for telling me! I did try to include emotion, though.

Nice. It is sweet. Consider adding more. It would sound more cute. You could call it "I Will Remember You"