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I like it but the eyes are too far up on the forehead. And yeah, you should shrink it. I personally think her hair should have less gray and yellow ...

I liked it but "Why would the P.E. want you to leave? Where?" I have the same questions. very descriptive though.

Oooooo. Thanks Rosey. That helped. I'm all good.

I loved it Meep! totally awesome! I laughed the whole way through! I love how Bella ends up slipping and dying! Perfect ending! Ha Ha!

i finally redid some of it. I do not know it it is better or not. Please tell me!

Yeah, too much love. Love this love that. Nice peom though. I liked the hush me to sleep thing. That was nice. Well, i have nothing else to say that ...

I love it except you are right. The left arm is a ton smaller than the right arm. Hee Hee.

I do not get what to do with my points. How do I use them? What are they for? Can anyone help?!!!

I think you did a great job Jenthura. The only thing is that all my writing teachers say that you should never start out a story with a dream because ...

I liked the description of the room. I also like, along with zoorah12 how you wrote the fly in with the story. I think the pizza, the mugs, and the ...

Reread it! I finally got around to editing it!

I liked this poem. I think what Tassen Spellbinder just said would be a smart idea. Great poem!

I am: ISFJ Introverted-100 Sensing- 15 Feeling- 50 Judging- 1

thanks everyone. You all helped me soo much. I will try to fix up the nitpicks.thanks!

I loved that. You had very nice description. My advice would be to space out your paragraphs. You had three really long paragraphs and I kept on losing my spot. ...