emmylou1995

I fixed the last word! Tell me what you think!

I think that your poem needs more description. Think of how much more people would know if you added something like "His mysteriously soft skin is like a drug to ...

I liked this poem. Along with Elinor Brynn and Suzanne I agree that the main thing you need is punctuation and structure. But, on the other hand, I loved the ...

Bleeding Why do these blackened tears roll out my eyes, Overflow the ocean of innocence. 'Till when the waves and breeze and beauty dies, The sizzling fires of sorrow dance. ...

Prologue I stood in the small, grassy meadow. Tiny orange flowers softly illuminated my vision. The bubbling of a nearby creek filled my ears and the smell of nature penetrated ...

Okay, to be honest, this was really bad. I did like the idea of the kids traveling through time. Maybe you should make there be less kids or something. Nine ...

Thamks everyone! The advice was great. I am actually thinking of changing the main characters names. I was thinking something medieval or fantasy. Or both. Any ideas?

The men took hold of my left hand and my waist. One of them grabbed the flaming hot metal burners as the other three held out my right arm. They ...

The moon could be seen through my curtains. The little white table under the window is bathed in moonlight. I watched in growing fear how the moon suddenly became black. ...

Faith. What is faith? Is it the beacon of hope in every human soul? Is it the eye opening freedom we all yearn for? Could it be the tranquil home ...

I HAD a cell phone. Somebody stole it from me last year, bought a texting plan and sent more than 500 text messages in less than 4 days, and i ...

I think this was on the verge of being very cliche but i still liked it. Mr.Davis and Dr.Smith have that familiar feel of evil villains. I, personally, think that ...

I liked it. Well, it was okay. Good start but i think you need to add more. Describe the place they are. Show the reader more emotion. I connected a ...

Okay, very confusing near the end. Unlike asxz, (And one more thing: Why would the captor just leave him there? You have some questions to answer!), I feel like a ...

Interesting. I can not decide if i like it or not. I think i do. Hey, it is drama and i love drama. Personally, (unlike thechocolatewritingcat), I like when there ...