emmylou1995

I think I liked the first one the best. It is so mysterious, planned and yet, not planned. I like it. The second was okay, though personally, the colors did ...

**Taken** Hi, this sounds interesting. Here is my idea. The few humans who still roam the Earth have lost track of what year it is. A young, fifteen year old ...

Interesting. Thanks for the warnings.

Wow, depressing. Of course, I like depressing. Okay, the only problem I have with it is the repetitiveness. Reading of and Mama over and over just makes me annoyed. Other ...

Wow Flower Child, that's depressing. What kind of bored are you talking about? I loved it. I like depressing poems, they give more feeling. I especially liked the end when ...

Thanks, Hiadel. That is exactly the feeling I was going for. I wanted the place around the girl to be beautiful and yet not seem to fit to her mood. ...

Thanks, EAHailstorm. Your critisism really helped. I fixed it up a little. I hope it is better. At least a little.

Um, sorry, but haikus are about nature. I agree with hannah on how sly could fefer to the moon but no, this haiku doesnt work. Anyways, haikus are all about ...

She woke to an argument. Rising from her bed, she tiptoed to the door and walked into the hallway. The tiny eleven year old feet pitter pattered on the wooden ...

The strong breeze interwove with my hair and started to dance, lifting my black curls to the sky. My face fell warm when the morning suns rays hugged it tight. ...

Myra or maybe something like Fija or Taye. A dark wizard who is tall and evil. He is cold and has long black hair. He owns a sword and wears ...

I changed it! I fixed the mom thing and I tried to fix up the tense problem. Please read over and tell me what you think! First chapter being posted ...

Wonderful! An amazing read, different from other fantasy stories. I particularly love the idea of the way he came to the village, how he hears the voice in his head, ...

It was good, sort of confusing. First of all, I think that you need to describe your actual settings more. You seem to focus much on the girls thoughts and ...

This seems like a great beginning! I love your idea. The character Suirikal made a shiver run down my spine, I like him. Personally, I agree with what Master_Yoda said. ...