emmylou1995

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I saw the boy, dressed in a simple brown tunic, staring at the demon. I screamed as I ran up and tried to punch it. The demon just turned towards ...

What have you done to me? A haze of chaos as affections shudder. Once we experienced wonder, innocent and childlike, but your love drifted away. A clouded vision of memory ...

Short and simple and yet, some kind of deeper meaning to it. I love the first stanza but the last stanza contradicts it. I think you could do a lot ...

Okay, I think this is sort of interesting. The idea is old but new ideas were stuck in your poem that I have not heard before. I like the idea ...

Okay, Flower~Child, I think that, one, this poem is depressing. But, that's pretty self explanatory. And two, its repetitive. And three, it is sort of weird. The word love and ...

Me and Sarah Pass are writing one.

Lilian lay on the soft, white bed, holding her newborn baby daughter, Valdirhya. The room around Lilian was simple and white. There sat a plush chair in the corner of ...

A little pet rock with colorful paint on it.

Answer: Its my freedom from the "real world".

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Interesting. I think a bald eagle would be too big to sit on someones shoulder. But it is a good sentance. 8/10 My First Sentance: Vibrant colors of orange and ...

Thanks RK! I love that sentance too. I am changing it all to present tense, with a little help.

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Good. I like your poem alot more now. Great job with the descriptions. I would suggest, in stanza two, to change it a little. You have black in it twice ...