emmily

I like the concept of this story. Generally, most Robin Hood stories focus on him and his group. I've never read one where the main character isn't a part of ...

Enlisting the other kids to help was a good plan but I'm not sure I buy the fact that the kids believe they can fix everything on their own. Considering ...

Chapter five Gary was awaken by loud chatter downstairs. His scruffy hair fell into his eyes as he swung his legs over the edge of the bed. His body was ...

*Warning: It is rated pg-13 because once again the charcater Gary has a dream about Isabella* Chapter four When Gary got out of the shower he put on grey sweat ...

Chapter three Just as Jay was about to settle down with a nice, cold beer he heard the old brass knocker thump the door. When he opened the door, Gary ...

I'm glad you notice things like shifts in point of view. I do purposely switch points of view when I move into a new section of a chapter but within ...

In terms of the plot line, I've really enjoyed this story. It's original and interesting with a nice mix of characters. However there a quite a errors that interupt the ...

Not that I'm an expert or anything, but according to what I've read, people don't wake up this suddenly from a coma. There are usually signs of that they are ...

Summary : Follow the adventures of a group of students at Arrow Ridge: an Christian wilderness school serving youth with emotional/behavioural issues. Through outdoors learning, group discussions and

I'd appreciate any advice/feedback that you are able to give. I particulary need help with verb tenses, more complex grammar, realism of dialogue and how readable the story is (does ...

I'm currently finishing up a gen fiction novel about a group of at risk youth (behavioural/emotional issues, petty crimes etc.) at a wilderness high school. If you're interested, you can ...

I'm currently finishing up a gen fiction novel about a group of at risk youth (behavioural/emotional issues, petty crimes etc.) at a wilderness high school. If you're interested, you can ...

I'd love to trade reviews with you if you have the time. I'm currently finishing up a gen fiction novel about a group of at risk youth (behavioural/emotional issues, petty ...

I'd love to trade reviews with you if you have the time. I'm currently finishing up a gen fiction novel about a group of at risk youth (behavioural/emotional issues, petty ...

I just finished reading the first chapter of your novel and plan to continue. I'd love to trade reviews with you if you have the time. I'd much rather have ...