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emilyleigh

  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: the friendless punishment

    I actually really like this, it was really descriptive. There were a few grammatical errors. “It didn’t matter now,” he thought to himself while grabbing at a leafless branch for ...

    Jun 24, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Cryptic state

    I fell into my cryptic state and let my eyes roll back. I watched the rattle tap lighly on the ground and listened to the hiss, hiss of deception slithering ...

    Jun 23, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Ceremony

    Hi! This was well written, but really random. I know it is based off a dream, but that doesn't mean you should write it exactly as one. No dream makes ...

    Jun 23, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Let The Story Unfold

    It's pretty good but there are some parts I feel are a little cliche. To fix that, show and don't tell. Like, when you say, "You hurt yourself physically and ...

    Jun 23, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Ceremony

    This was a dream of mine, one that I actually remembered. So I wrote it all down, and I realize it needs work. But is the idea worth working on? ...

    Jun 23, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: I think of you, of the moment we caressed.

    Thanks for the revisions Snoink :) It was meant to be literal, and then the end to have some religous meaning. I wanted it to be able to be interpreted ...

    Feb 25, 2010
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Is It Wrong?

    I don't think that timing really matters, each person works at their own pace. But I think for most people they wrote their best poems fairly quick and out of ...

    Feb 6, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: I think of you, of the moment we caressed.

    Okay, so i know this poem needs a lot of work, I just wrote this without really thinking or anything, and I feel the ending needs some I would love ...

    Feb 6, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: I'm dreaming of a world

    I liked your poem, it's usually harder to write a happy poem, at least in my opinion, and this one was pretty good. I just have one suggestion, and that ...

    Feb 6, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: A fallling love

    I like short poems that have simple words, because i feel that they really do hold so much more pwer and emotion. However, you do need to have punctuation in ...

    Feb 6, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lycanthrope

    Wow that was really good! Lots of poems lose me attention quickly but I really wanted to read all of this one. The only thing I found that I would ...

    Feb 6, 2010
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey, I'm new :)

    EEP! Yes, we will get along well, lol. I am kind of obsessed with them. Well... not obsessed, but my room is full of pigs and everybody gets me pig ...

    Jan 20, 2010
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey, I'm new :)

    Hi Emily welcome to YWS! I'm peanut or Sarah *gives a piggy* I like them too and I think you'll get along fine with Snoink ;). Awesome I see you ...

    Jan 20, 2010
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey, I'm new :)

    Hey Emily, welcome to YWS! :D I'm Snoink... or one of the green goblins on YWS that you can go to if you ever need help! So... questions, eh? :D ...

    Jan 19, 2010
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey, I'm new :)

    My names Emily, I'm 16 and I live in the US. I've always enjoyed reading and writing, but began to realize it's my passion when I started highschool, thanks to ...

    Jan 18, 2010


"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites