emalily

I am buried as you cry Y ou think I hated you , but it was a lie I always loved you and you never knew Before I d ied ...

Yo - this is my review. First off, realer is sooo not a word. Also I do not understand what it is about and therefore I cannot review it properly.

Hi, I am your biggest fan and I am here to review your song :) Bought her love, her trust and her heart I do not think you should say ...

I have taken out the bit about people dying because I didn't know how to make it sound less uncaring and I realised it wasn't really nessecary I hope the ...

I agree with Maddy except for these bits: couldn't take no more (because I hate double negatives) They'd snicker I think laughed works just as well and laughing seems more... ...

I actually like the original more than the revised version. Well some of it anyway, particularly the last line. Do you think you could maybe join them together to make ...

This is a pretty cute poem and I reckon it would work well as a song. Just one thing it should be " you're all on your own" not "your" ...

Here's me singing this song... I'd like to tell you what it's like The way I feel for you inside But the words just won't come out I don't think ...

Thankyou so much!

Hey this sounds like a really interesting story! “Hi!” she says. I grit my teeth, “I’m Caroline.” In that bit it kinda sounds like Emily is the one saying she's ...

I have absolutely no insight into what category this falls under haha But I do think that it does feel finished. You could add more and it wouldn't drag on ...

Hey! I like your writing style and if there more to this I would probably read it haha. When is this set? I take it during a war? Anway sounds ...

Hey thanks everyone for your comments I've tried to take all your advice into account but I haven't changed it a lot Anyway, thanks heaps

I also see this as more of a song, I thought it was actually before I read what section it was in. I really like the idea though

I agree. I think it's sounds good. Keep writing!