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Re: Separated
I'm at the beach, and a sexy waiter named Paco is serving me strawberry lemonade on a tray as I lay on a fluffy yellow beach towel on a beach ...
Jan 1, 2011 -
Re: Clouds of Chalk
The snaps on my grips make satisfying clicks, Maybe today it'll be me she picks, The room is loud with bustling conversations, I read a poster on the wall that ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Deleted
i thought this was great, i couldn't stop reading it! can't wait to read more. :)
Dec 13, 2010 -
Re: Average (Prologue)
i really loved this; please hurry to post more- im anxious to read it!!! the only thing i would change is that you said "I had friends. Average friends. My ...
Dec 13, 2010 -
Re: Undetermined
Chapter 1 I walk down the vacant, gray sidewalk, surveying distance between cracks. My arms goosebump, but I don't pull out the coat from my backpack. I try to make ...
Dec 13, 2010 -
Re: Numb (Part 2)
"Why am I depressed?" I repeat, trying to function the meaning of this question. I stare at the melon-green walls of my therapists office, my forefinger rubbing the leather chair ...
Jun 7, 2010 -
Re: Death Is An Angel
Kitty: This, per usual, was absolutely genius, if i do say so myself. I loved the way it rhymed, but wasn't at all forced. It flowed elegantly, like icing laced ...
May 23, 2010 -
Re: LastPaladin Photos!
LastPaladin: These pictures were absolutely gorgeous. I love how you incorporated the sunlight into each one, and how they were all of nature, but have a modern effect of society ...
May 23, 2010 -
Re: I Want to Fly
Dear jane: This was a very well-written, emotional poem, and I absolutely loved it. I think your perspective, language, and descriptions were extremely good in this piece. I only have ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Numb
My eyes fly open, and I look around, my husband's back presses against mine, as I prop up on my elbow, and I know in my gut that something's wrong ...
May 12, 2010 -
Re: Mermaids are evil
Okay, first off- O_O Whoa. Dude. That. Was. Awesome, man. That painting was totally sick!!! It's better than something you'd see in a freaking museum! The details were amazing, and ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: Words Will Always Hurt You
Jane: Okay, this story was absolutely fantastic. Totally meaningful, thoughtful, and with a moral! I loved this, and couldn't stop reading it!!! I made no note of any spelling, grammatical, ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: A jar of glowworms and stale memories
My dear Kamas, you have done it again!!! I was incredibly entertained by your series of poems, and thought it was very creatives to make the many poems into one. ...
May 9, 2010 -
Re: See Through
KingOlion: I thought this was very good, for the most part; here is my cousin's input (who by the way is NOT a writer ^^): -It was good in the ...
May 9, 2010 -
Re: Hurt in the Shadows
Kyousuke: This was amazing. Your descriptions were awesome, and the rhythm was flowing and free, as was your rhyming, which in most cases, tends to seem forced, and not natural. ...
May 9, 2010
