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Sorry if this is hard to read because of the format... I couldn't figure it out :|. I really need some good editing here; I started out feeling good about ...

Welcome to YWS! No! I can't believe he(?) did that to Alan! It was an unexpected ending though, which is good. Your main character was shallow, in my opinion; I ...

AMEN! That is what being a Christian means! As soon as I read "I Believe" I was like, ugh, another hopelessly romantic poem. Then I read the first line, and ...

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Wow. I wish there was a 'love' button! I am Christian (assuming you are Christian) too (high-five!) I think everyone else already caught everything, so I have nothing to critique. ...

Although this poem is sad, it made me happy when I read it (I know, I'm weird). I thought I was the only one who ever felt that way, and ...

I am merely a prop in a play; an everlasting play of monotony and emulation. I am surrounded by false faces and futile conversations. I beat my bloody fists against ...

Wow. This is really good! I've always wanted to be able to write like that; I still have a lot of practicing to do, and even then I doubt I'll ...

Before you read: This poem was inspired by the song, "Music Box Angel" by Michele McLaughlin, in case you don't guess that the angel in the box is a music ...

This is a funny poem! I like it! I only have a few nitpicks to make. Cailey wrote: Under Bad Guy’s arms she shivered and said, “Brrrr!” This line was ...

I liked the idea of this poem, but it didn't flow very well to me at all, although I admit to writing poetry like that, too :). The season analogy ...

Wow! Thanks FloralTiara and TaylaChase! That is really helpful. It's been a while since I've written anything (or read anything; my library card expired), so I'm really rusty. To say ...

On the far side of a long and narrow cobblestone road stood a trembling figure; a child, draped in dark blue cloth, staring with closed eyes at the sky. She ...