elephantwalrus

Hi there, I love how entertaining this piece is. I can totally relate to your near-death skiing experiences, as I've had a few myself, and I appreciate that you can ...

Hi there, I'm interested to see where this piece goes. Quick question: which historical era is it, or will that be answered later? I like the playfulness of this piece ...

Hi there, First off, this piece made me laugh. I don't know why, but I just thought it was so funny! So if that was your goal, good job! I ...

Hi there, At first, I didn't like how reflexive this piece was, meaning I didn't like how the narrator addresses himself and the audience. At the end, when I realized ...

Hi there, I don't usually critique action/adventure stories, but I really enjoyed this piece. Is it a prologue to something more, or just something meant to stand on its own? ...

Hi there! Welcome to the Young Writer's Society! Sorry that no one's taken the time to critique your work yet. Let's fix that now, shall we? I really appreciate the ...

“Becca, it doesn’t matter whether you fix every detail! Life is fine with flaws!” Nate ran his fingers through his hair agitatedly, racking his brain as to why his girlfriend ...

Hi there, Your voice is very sweet in this poem, which I like a lot. I also like all the different ways you thought of how you might have lost ...

Hi there, I like the cadence of this piece. It flows nicely. Actually, I just like the whole poem. It's tone is serious, yet romantic, and the imagery is sound, ...

Hi there, First off, this is a creative idea. However, I think it belongs in a poetry forum instead of non-fiction. Your diction provides for imagery that would make it ...

Hi there! I liked the perspective of this piece. The emotion was constant throughout without being over-the-top, and the imagery of the taillights shining like rubies was particularly thoughtful. Firs

Hi there, First, I'd like to point out if there are any expletives in your work you should probably rate it as such so that no one gets offended. That ...

“Dear God,” Angela Whitaker paused while kneeling beside her bed. For a moment, her posture seemed absurd. The twenty-something had nothing to say to God at the moment. No request. ...

I liked the imagery in these lyrics a lot. It gives the audience something to think about instead of just complaining about your heartbreak. I appreciate the poetry of this ...

Hi there, surajjangid! Is this a piece of fiction, or just some of your own thoughts? If they are your own thoughts, I agree that they do not belong in ...