elephantwalrus

This is a thoughtful poem! I like the theme, but I think you enjamb a bit to much. Try making some of the lines like "My mother uses / Her ...

I really liked this! Often, I felt that the last line of each stanza didn't quite fit as far as meter goes, but other than that, it was a good ...

Whoa, I realy enjoyed this! Your imagery was fantastic! My only criticism is the changing verb tense in the last stanza. I don't know if "knew" should be "knows;" has ...

I have to admit, when I first saw the word "reaper," I wanted to hit my head against a brick wall. But, a couple words later, I saw that you ...

October Cries Inharmonious screeches Echo down the hall; The ears of students and teachers alike Fitfully start to bawl. A couple of aspiring show-offs Surface above the noise As an ...

I think this is a cool idea, but you need to expand on it. There is so much more that you could do with this poem! If you have other ...

Those Winter Sundays Robert Hayden, 1962 Sundays too my father got up early and put his clothes on in the blueblack cold, then with cracked hands that ached from labor ...

Why thank you! :D I will continue to work on this. Thanks for taking the time to comment!

Thank you for reading it :). I'm making a physical portfolio of my better this alright to put in there, or is it just too dull?

Well, I had a hard time finding a beat, too. All in all, I really liked the verses. They were very sweet. The chorus, on the other hand, was a ...

This is a really creative poem! I honestly really like the rhyme scheme here. The last three lines were a bit too ambiguous, in my opinion, but all in all ...

Disciplined fingers Glide over keys Dulcet melodies Infatuate me Into a dopey state Where I dare not escape Lest the spell is broken, And I am left here Staring at ...

This poem is filled with profundity :D I like it a lot. My only problem with it is that it lacks a definite flow. The whole thing doesn't connect very ...

This is a very nice poem! You broke the flow a couple times ("I am drenched in wishes that refuse to disappear," "When day comes, they hide and wait for ...

I liked the poem, but I was distracted by the lack of punctuation. I think adding some would add a lot to the piece Into the opened-up twilight They soar ...