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Now see, the poem is perfectly clear to you. The idea of no emotion is what I wanted from the reader. I wanted the reader to experience what the narrator ...

The flow of poem works rather well. I very much enjoyed reading it, but the length (mind you length in poems is not important), but seems to be a little ...

Well if you would not mind me asking "What did you get from the poem?"

It seems to be a little forced, considering the rhyming. The concept is interesting and could become something worth while. Keep writing. Also the editing done above is a good ...

Frozen once again Hollow in a shell I melt in the wake Turn solid with the night. How will this end with time never ending and me descending in a ...