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Re: Post your gif HERE!
I was waiting for you people.
Aug 14, 2011 -
Re: Suffocating
Hello there. There are feathers. Pressing down. On my chest. And I. Can’t. Breathe. This has an interesting starting but the stop ruins the flow of the stanza. It makes ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: The Writer's Lament
Hello there. Another hour wasted... The keys seem to hate me, The computer screen is an endless sea. The starting was not at all convincing and neither was it in ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: Life of a Mountain-Inception
A strange creature was the mountain, it was named "the mountain" but it was not actually one, it was a frail insect which had spikes on its back which gave ...
Jul 30, 2011 -
Re: YWS Screencaps
That is one huge avvie!! :shock:
Jun 4, 2011 -
Re: Playground
Hello there. :3 Nitpicks: Come with me And take my hand; Shouldn’t this be the other way round? Because when someone takes you hand then only that person would be ...
Jun 4, 2011 -
Re: Loneliness of Love
Hello there. :3 Welcome to YWS. Hope you like it here. Nitpicks: So many days, so many nights have come and gone A good start to your poem by this ...
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: Moonlight
Hello there. :3 Welcome to YWS! Hope you like it here. Nitpicks: Stop softly into the moonlight; Catch a moonbeam in your hand. Whisper sweet secrets into the night As ...
Jun 2, 2011 -
Re: In ten years time
Hello there. :3 Nitpicks: Don't forget my face, or the stupid things i've said, please, retain a memory. can you do that? would you do that for me? Your poem ...
Jun 2, 2011 -
Re: Dismay
Hello there. :3 Nitpicks: My heart sinks in absolute dismay, my pride falling from my heart. The happiness I once felt, washed out of me and seeping away. This is ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: The Unspeakable
Hello there. :3 The wind blows always , So is there any particular reason on keeping this place blank or it was just a mistake? though it might not seem ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Carevale di ipocriti
Hello there. :3 You have a really different poem. The name carnival of hypocrites is very interesting. Kind of catchy! But my friend this poem had some loose ends. The ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Rainy Day
Hello there. :3 Nitpicks: It is raining Steady and consistent I am alone Safe and consistent Rain! I love it when it rains. And the smell of earth and the ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: Influences
Hello there. :3 This is a good poem. The title is the thing that made me read it and then review it. The rhyme scheme and the stanza format is ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: how do you know?
Hello there. :3 Well, you have a lot of questions, there. Your poem started off with a good rhyme and flow and I expected it be one of those good ...
May 29, 2011