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Honestly.. I like most of this just the way it is. You didn't sound like you were trying to make this very complex, which is perfectly fine. For that reason ...

There are times for feeling fragile - perhaps you would call it paranoid - but sometimes I find myself curled against a dark corner, palms down in a white grip ...

Again, interesting style. While this worked on your other piece, I'm not sure if it does with this one. I like that it adds a good rhythm to the poem, ...

This is indeed a neat little style you've got here. Given the proper subject, such as a Cyborg, this is very creative. Normally I wouldn't be inclined to say I ...

I don't want to cry because I can see it in your eye s that (no comma) you are happy without me. We are apart , We are away , ...

This tells a fantastic story.. you had me interested (especially with word choice), and usually I feel intimidated by poems of such length (not because I don't like length, but ...

daawwwhhh! The first one is so cuuute :] He looks like the kind of character that everyone wants to hug, and he doesn't know why. :P The second one is ...

The overall concept of the poem is good. I like the images you incorporate in the piece, and your word choice compliments the poem pretty well, though it does have ...

Ah, there we are. Pretty impressive :) It's cool that you're into making knives and stuff like that. These days you'd think that these things are all just built by ...

Heheh. I didn't quite understand the title until I reached the end of the poem - I like what you did, taking on the phrase "I feel golden" and incorporating ...

This leaves me wondering whether the narrator is actually getting along with the person he/she is speaking to. Is the narrator questioning the feelings of this person out of doubt, ...

Unfortunately, if there is supposed to be a picture, it's not visible. I would have been interested in seeing the knife, though. Oh well. :)

Wow, these are great. I especially love the colors in the last one, and the bubble one :]

Hah, this is so awesome xD I'm not sure if these were your intentions, but I think it's cool how the picture takes on a darker tone as you focus ...

Absolutely brilliant. I love this piece; your diction is perfect for the poem, your thoughts are clear, and it has a great flow to it. I think in some places ...