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Heya Coral. :) I think I'll try and take this in pieces, as each line is pretty much filled to the brim with detail. we’re sprawled out on the dirty ...

Hiya! :) Welcome to YWS! Nice to meet you. You sound like you're all ready to go - can't wait to see your writing. There are plenty of writers on ...

AAGGGHHH. I accidently pressed "submit" instead of "preview." Since I wasn't able to quote the second stanza of your poem just by editing the comment, I'm going to write another ...

Poetry written on the spot is the best kind. The fact that you wrote this in a car (rather than the content) reminds me of a song called "Drive," by ...

I personally like little things such as "continental continent," though I can see how others may think it's a bit redundant. It's ultimately your choice, either way. Overall, I really, ...

Sorry, Coral. Earl Gray > Chamomile, Taste-wise. :P Excellent write.

Haha. I love seeing all of these "I'm new" posts. Makes me wish I was smart enough to do that when I first joined. :P ANYWAY. Welcome to YWS! As ...

This poem has a quick pace - I really like the way it plays out with a very natural flow to it. Seeing as this type of poetry isn't quite ...

I just hit backspace, and my whole review was deleted. fapsekrtjas;dfklj'asd. sigh. Anyway. Hiya, again. Seeing that sir Kafka has already done some line-picking, I ended up just forming an ...

Change my shadow, my shapeshifting thing I like shapeshifting, but you should use a stronger adjective in place of "thing" twist me and bloat me and make me cry, for ...

I wake in the golden hue of the morning; Cassius lurks between the skylines-- I read him like a shadow sifting through spotlight, whispering extinguish the white, adapt to the ...

Heya :) The name's Ear. Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy your stay here - there are definitely a lot of people here who are more than willing to ...

Haha. Corasaurus. Let's get crackin'. First off, I think this poem is a major improvement compared to the original piece. I'm curious as to what the time interval was between ...

Great piece you've got, here! I love the way the tension builds throughout the piece - your imagery's great. One thing I will suggest is to try to me more ...

Great piece. I often feel this when I'm talking with my friends... most times they never notice when something's wrong, and when they do, they make a joke about it. ...