dragonrider

I LOVED this poem. It's really good. The change in the character is beautiful. It's awesome. But, some sentences didn't flow right. But I LOVED the magnesium part. (lol) Keep ...

I really enjoyed this. It was a bit short though and some lines you might want to revise and fix. Good job. Keep on writing! Dragon Rider

You're sentences were all over the place. You repeated the same words over and over. And you didn't quite feel the emotion. I mean, you weren't quite in depth. I ...

Sweethearts, I have to say, I was not hooked. There was nothing significantly interesting about it. It seemed a little "neutral". I didn't get a passion, angry, sad, or really ...

I really enjoyed it. Impressive ending. Very well done! Keep on writing! Dragon Rider

Very, very bittersweet and enjoyable. Keep on writing! Dragon Rider

I didn't like the "10 plus 2" part. Despite the crazy marry and die together thing it was sweet. That was a little weird. Also, I think it would have ...

You had sentences all over the place and several of them were . . . boring :(( and confusing. Use interesting adjectives that keep you hooked and thrilled and make ...

Interesting . . . it's good, but you could have been a little extensive. Great ending. Keep on writing! Dragon Rider

Really good. Only a couple sentences didn't flow as smoothly as others. Dragon Rider

I don't think it's a fully formed thought in your head. It was confusing. I don't know if it's about a guy with a girlfriend/wife or about his daughter or ...

I really enjoyed it, but you're going to want to post new words. You repeated love, sorrow, fairest, they're lovely words, but a bit overused. It had an interesting flow ...

A good subject to write about, but sorrry, I got pretty bored. I know what you were saying, but it was hard to follow, the sentences were choppy and a ...

I enjoyed it. But some lines didn't flow together very smoothly. You should lengthen them out, add new words. But good job! Dragon Rider

You need to spice things up or people will lose interest. The story itself is interesting, but some lines are a little cliche and "unclear" and a little "plain". However, ...