dragonrider

This is the Prologue and 1st chapter of my novel. I've yet to do some good revising, but hope you enjoy all the same! And yes, this is in the ...

It was an interesting read, but honestly, you were a bit unfocused. You jumped from the library book, to someone being kicked out, and Shakespeare/Anne Frank. You need to sharpen ...

It was a pretty enjoyable read. Some grammar was off, you used "grey" one too many times, and it was a little unfocused. Excellent ending, which shows the conflict of ...

Interesting. However, I think you used too much swearing and plain words when you could have used more descriptive words. An ironic ending, considering the character, but I liked it. ...

Well done! A different style indeed, but very likable. I didn't really see anything that needed correcting except for that you might have wanted to separated the beginning and the ...

Yeah . . . definetely the spirit! I can honestly write that I have never read a poem that had tampons in it. Good job on being unique! I really ...

I really enjoyed this poem as well. What confused me though, was the last paragraphs. I like an aura of mystery myself, but this just seemed random. You're talking about ...

Your work is unfocused, there is terrible grammar, bland words, and it was hard to follow. Most of it didn't make any sense. You need more practice, trust me. It's ...

Wrote this last night because I was bored and need more practice in poetry. Trying something new . . . Anyway, review please! Hope you enjoy! :smt003 :smt001 :smt004 :pirate3: ...

Thanks for your opinions you guys. To clear some of the confusion (well, true I could/should have cleared some of it up), what I was trying to do in the ...

A little disappointing :( . . . While the poem flowed well 8) the sentences were random. :evil: While they stayed on beat, they didn't make any sense. :? :?: ...

I REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAALLLLLLLLLLLLYYYYYYYYYYYYYY liked it. Crafted well. Writen VERY well! But some sentences were awkward like this one Not a thing was v

Sounds brilliant!!!! :evil: Good review by the way. Oh and it's a big long for a review though. Imagine fitting all that on the back cover. You should also separate ...

Sorry, I screwed something up in my review. What I meant by "yucky" I meant the ending was just like a "cut-off". It was a poor ending. Like ending a ...

It was really short and straight-forward. You should lengthen it a few more paragraphs longer. I didn't like the sentences At long last, he moved his lips closer to mine ...