dragonfphoenix

Knight Dragon, here to review. As the two strong men began punching each other over the piece of cheese... Um...Really? How big is this cheese? Is it valuable? Are these ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! ...and I tell you I won’t have it happen again.” The "I won't" is kind of implied by the "I tell you," so it bogs ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! (Before anyone else does. Mine!!!) “They need rest, Tirion.” Christian scrambled back inside and peered out at the courtyard. Morrow paced back and forth in ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! (Onwards I press.) (They did not offer any to Morrow.) If you really wanted this to be a minor parenthetical note, then I would have ...

Knight Dragon, here to review (and ultimately try to get your remaining chapters out of the Green Room)! Okay, on chapter 70, I only have one question/concern. When did Narodnaya ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! To the east the sky was the molten gold of sunrise, though to the west it was still a deep royal blue; Christian had not ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Oops. I wish I'd known this was in here earlier. Starting as far back as possible (at the beginning, at some point) would have been ...

Knight Dragon, attempting my first mobile phone review. Okay, I'd heard a lot about this story, and most of it positive. I may have read a chapter or two somewhere ...

Knight Dragon, here to review. Okay, before I do, I must say that your description of your chapter practically dragged me into this. Female protagonist, Alphas (what are those?), and ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! They were all very vivid colors Gotta love Mark Twain sometimes. The first thing I thought of when I read that was this quote . ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Okay, so I understand this is a structured poem, and the point is to emulate dream-reality. However, structure says a lot, and when it's the ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! Leaning in closely to it, I fixed it with a stared. Minor typo at the end of that sentence. Very funny mental image, though. :) ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! You struggle with using contractions. That's a consistent pattern, so duly noted and moving on. :) Your sentences can tend to run a bit long. ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! I'm reading this, and something feels off, but I can't tell what. It's like... Father sighed, as it took some time, but I did not ...

Knight Dragon, here to review! You have a very straightforward message in this poem. Technically, nothing glaring stands out. However, I felt that it was a bit too tinted, if ...