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Hey, alright first of all, this is really really long. I agree with VicternoO, you should definitely submit things of this length in increments. I only got through about six ...

Curlyqpride, Wow. thanks for that comment. I'm just choked up right now that it actually affected you like that, I didn't know it could do that. Thanks doesn't even cover ...

Jay : Thanks so much you have no idea what that means to me! Fangala : You're right.. it is a wicked weird coincidence and also thanks for reminding me ...

I finally figured out a title for this so next time I post it will be as All Babies Are Blessings… At Least That’s What They Tell Me I'll probably ...

Hey! Alright so I like this better than the previous chapter. The only thing I thought was confusing was how you had said that Sam was gay in the first ...

Hey Well i'm not going to repeat all the little mistakes I found because Avens Dolor already pointed them out. I thought the story was told well, it had a ...

Hey, unsterblichkeit36, This was good. I only caught a few mistakes: “Oh yes please. Amelia might try to convince you that she doesn’t need “swimmies” in the pool, but she ...

Ashleylee, Thanks a lot for the reviews to both chapter 4 and 5, and don't worry about the whole time thing, it's totally fine. I agree with you on Ethan ...

Aw man you did it again! This chapter was great! I love the interactions between Isaac and Sophia, and I am really glad that you made Isaac embarrassed, it's a ...

Thanks Jay. I didn't even notice the Carl Kyle thing so I probably will change that, you're right, they are too similar. :D I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Thanks ...

So, this is the second half of the dream... still thinking of a title, I've narrowed it down to like five choices so I'll try to figure it out by ...

Wow. This was amazing. I loved how you incorporated poetry into the piece, it fit very well. Let's just get the little things over with now, shall we? The beating ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! Okay so after you make sure your ratio is all set I strongly suggest that you post more of this. I thought it was really good, ...

Okay so you've definitely have talent for this sort of thing. It was really good, a little confusing at parts but still really good. I just got really ridiculously confused ...

Hey, SASSYLADY333, So I've been reading these chapters and decided to add my critique to this chapter because it's the most recent. In all four of these I've only seen ...