dolwright

If I had no more time left to be here Would you cherish what we had? Would memories of me make you smile? Or will you begin to be what ...

I love the sequencing of events in each paragraph. I think there is a typo error in the third paragraph, "therefor-e" should have an 'e' right. The imagery is perfect. ...

Perfect. I love the genius (you) who wrote this.Funny, interesting and precise. The beginning and end was definitely on point. 150 target words that made an effect 1000 words wouldn't ...

I like your poem. I share your thoughts on the issue of corruption. When i looked up the topic at first, i thought it was about corruption in the political ...

Hi, overall this poem is not bad. Firstly, these corrections must be made; "it starts a stressed chain of thought"- the 'i' there should be capitalized a 's' after thought ...

I love this poem, though very precise, you kept it simple and the message was clear. The punctuations in this few lines need correcting though "My heart, It bleeds for ...

Very Interesting story but surprisingly short, I expected a continuing scene; but anyways maybe it's a plot to keep the reader in suspense. In the second paragraph, "What?", a comma ...

OK, I think anyone reading this will definitely feel the hatred and passion for whoever, I really don't know the details of your rant about this news anchor but you ...

Thanks SmylinG; I understand. I'm not really good with rhymes; but it's something I'm working on.

The world that nursed my hope In you I found my place Pen wrapped in fingers embrace My fears are left to grope My words come alive It has found ...

Interesting story of life after death, Nice Imagery and plot. One thing though, I couldn't quite figure out what happened at the end. I got lost in the concluding paragraphs, ...

Good poem. It would have been perfect if the punctuations were fixed right. The commas and full-stops disrupted the flow of the poem while reading.

Hi Writewriter, I'm sorry for what you had to go through, I can say I understand what you feel because I've been abused and tortured as a kid too, I ...

Nice structure and rhyming. Love the overall feeling this poem gives. It's perfect. "I will not beg my broken heart to heal, To feel, "Because in the end, I don't ...

HI DeeBee, This is a wonderful piece you have written here. from your words I can tell you are a christian which is also wonderful. Though there are a few ...