dolwright

Okay super duper poet, this is amazing! I love the rhyming structure which was fantastic. This is a piece I totally enjoyed reading; though I think there's something you omitted ...

Good Writing! The structure was okay but the rhyming was a bit off. They did not follow a particular pattern. Most of us writers have this problem so I think ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS Headfreakjay. What you wrote is extraordinary. I guess it's about various characters right?. The punctuation and grammar is right on point. Very creative.I'll like ...

OK, First of all, I think it would make the poem a whole lot better if you capitalized the first letter at the beginning of every line. E.g: "T(t)here is ...

Hi there, Nice poem. I loved the last stanza. In the fifth stanza, " You try to stay buddy buddy with everyone"; doesn't sound appropriate for this poem and it's ...

Lovely story and very interesting. I would like to point out a few corrections though: " Copper takes time to exam the doll"- "exam" there I beleive should be "examine". ...

I love the storyline, very interesting. Actually I'm a sucker for vampire stories. I also love the way it ended, the dramatic irony used, when you made it all seem ...

Baby, you've been on my mind for days now I think I wanna write you a love song It's you I want and nobody else But I when I see ...

Hi dear, I like this. I love the soft tone used and the fact that anyone can understand it. Good work. :)

I love this poem! Just reading it, it felt like a breath of fresh air and sunshine. I love the imagery used and 'cumulus prison', way to go! I would ...

This is a well-written piece; except that it felt rushed; the paragraphing appeared too clustered, making it less enjoyable when reading. It would do good to put more spacing between ...

"Missing You" [Verse 1] Thinking of you, Don't know what to say Don't know what to do when I'm missing you. [Chorus] Like a day without the sun, Like a ...

I like! I found the first poem amusing. I really couldn't criticize anything. Thumbs up on this one.;)

Lovely written poem. The first line of the seventh stanza, I think "am" is supposed to be "was": "Before I thought I was a beauty" I like the oxymoron " ...

Great Poem. I have a problem with this line though,"I won't give you the any more chances to"; I think it should be "I won't give you any more chances ...