dolwright

OK. I can already form a melody to this lyric. It's very well written and I know it'll even sound better in a song. Kudos

There seems to be quite a number of grammar and punctuation errors in your writing. The fifth stanza needs revising: " Dear Mr. President, I would love to tell you ...

Great poem, kind of like the way I feel now, just wish we could go back to when I was very young.There are a lot of capitalization errors, I'll make ...

I love this, at first I thought I'll give it a pass, but on reading it, I'm glad I did. I especially love the last line: "I would choose the ...

Your Poem was the most Intriguing and the imagery was on point. I like the use of free verse, there was no forced rhyming. Just reading it made me want ...

Okay, the first stanza got me puzzled, "In four direction blows: blows what? "And then it's all a beautiful Art: I think it would be better written this way, " ...

Nice structure and poem layout. Also the Imagery used there was expository and gave the reader insight as to what insomnia feels like. I really don't see much to criticize ...

Nice poem, just that I don't see the need for the pause effect in the last stanza. Good writing.

Nice poem, just a few capitalization errors I'll like to point out; " beat, beat beating In our chest. "and obscene Into the norm. Also in the last stanza, " ...

The last thing you wrote about your muse...funny. I think the seventh line should be corrected thus; " Where Imagination hides away". That's all. Keep writing.

" My feet pounds the grass under my cleats"; since the first rhyme word is in the plural, cleat should come in plural form too. Good Writing, short but very ...

Very cleverly written,The last six comments has done justice to the review, and I think this piece would be a blast if you revised it and make corrections where necessary. ...

Good poem structure, though I didn't get the last three lines, "I'll just face the fact that it was a, Bunch of Smack! You know you could absolutely do better ...

I love this piece, simple yet very captivating and full of message. I noticed that you started with the rhyming scheme ABAB in the first two stanzas, and couldn't keep ...

Hi, okay, I'll just highlight the major errors I see here: "You really can't call (I)t crying- some capitalization errors here ...You really can't call It dying.-I don't see any ...